I am a Year 8 learner in Room 2 at Pt England School in Auckland, NZ.
My teacher is Ms. Tapuke.
David I thought this was a really funny short story. It just goes to show how few words it takes to set the scene for an event like this. Here you are using a technique called 'show not tell' where your author has to infer (or put together the rest of the story in their minds). A great way to use the five words!